A Second Dating Profile Review
Published on October 15, 2007
Last week, I was contacted with a request to review another online dating profile. Her profile was good although both Kate and I had a few comments. The profile has been shortened to only cover specific areas that advice was offered for:
The Profile
For fun I love going to the city – anything with lots of people and lots to see!I am looking for a guy that is used to a big family and would like one of his own! I am a kind, active woman looking for someone share my life with. I love the city, I could walk around downtown every day. I would like to take my date to my favorite sports bar for a Steelers game or somewhere else equally exciting. I hate bugs though so don’t ever propose camping or anything like it!
Everyday want to do something new like traverse all the downtown coffee shops or check out Tokyo, Japan LOL I am a bit witty LOL But I am also loyal, friendly and intelligent. I’m looking for someone that can keep up with me and who someday would love to have a family!
My perfect date would be to take someone to the newest hotspot in downtown for dinner, then take them to the museum.
Brad’s Thoughts
Time Frame
I recommended that she might want to add some type of time frame around how soon she wanted a big family. I would haven’t been scared off if Kate said she wanted a big family when I first read her dating profile but I would have wondered how soon she wanted one.
Internet Jargon
Replace the “LOL” after Japan and witty with an exclamation point. It may actually be more “honest” to leave them in since if they represent the way someone actually talks on the internet. Still, even though I use slang in my day-to-day conversations, when writing someone I try to avoid using it.
Risky Word: Propose
I don’t think it is safe for a woman to use the word “propose” anywhere in her profile. After one bad date with a woman desperate for marriage, I looked for any sign in other dating profiles that would suggest there could be a repeat of that nightmare! I suspect other guys have gone through similar experiences and may look for the same signs. She loses nothing by using the word “suggest” instead.
Taking vs. Going
I would change the word “take” to some more inclusive verb, like “go together”, “meet”, etc. You “take” your dog somewhere; you spend time with a date!
Kate’s Thoughts
Being Inclusive
Try showing a wider range of your interests because everything revolved around the city. I got the feeling you might be intimidating to those who are not as familiar with the city (like me, if I were a guy!)
Internet Jargon
You don’t really need the LOLs because you’re text is very funny and playful, so I think the LOLs take away more than they add! Although, I’m kind of ancient when it comes to texting and cool abbreviations.
I suspect there are those out there who think I am too picky with these profile reviews but I would disagree. When your dating profile is your only representation to the rest of the online dating world, it is important to express yourself as well as possible.
Author: Brad
Brad initially struggled with online dating but over time became quite successful using it. He met his wife using online dating and has been giving advice and helping people improve their results since 2007. He has written a Free Online Dating Guide to help others find success with online dating. You can learn more about his personal experience using online dating and running this website here.
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